When beginning to comprehend what a
writer’s “moves” are, you can think about what meaning is accompanied by the
word in our culture. “Wow, he sure put the moves on you!” or “Smooth move, man!”
In each case, we are so familiar with the word “move(s)” that we know it
represents some action or word choice specific to the subject. A move in text is
the choices a writer makes that are specific to them and what point they are
trying to establish in their writing. Kerry Dirk has quite a few eye-grabbing
moves in her article “Navigating Genres”. Right from the beginning, her title
is short and tells the reader exactly what they are getting themselves into,
and this is her first move. The rest of the article follows this same to-the-point
sort of speech. Another move of hers is that she speaks to her readers very
informally, and by directly addressing them. For instance, the beginning of one
of her paragraphs starts with this: “Let’s look into country music lyrics a bit
more. Bear with me if you’re not a fan.” Here, she’s informally inviting the
reader to continue to follow her train of thought, as well as jokingly
addressing the readers’ musical preferences. This move makes the reader a bit
more comfortable in their seats while keeping them interested in such a way
that both fans of country music and those who dislike it are going to keep
reading to discover just what idea she is going to get across to them. Another
crucial move Dirk makes is her addition of multiple different kinds of examples
to back up her work. Some are indented and bulleted points, others are simply
indented blocks of text that are quotes from other scholars within her field of
study. Not only does this move add credibility to the statements Dirk makes and
the ideas she presents, but it keeps the reader following along and better
establishes what is to be learned in reading the article. One more important
move Dirk makes in this article is she gives a self-generated, extensive
example to show visually what “navigating genres” really entails. She gives a
scenario, specifically one that requires a ransom letter, and shows three
different ways to write them after the example, Dirk analyzes the fact that the
reader could pick out the most appropriate one without knowing that in doing
that, they themselves were already navigating a genre. This move of Dirk’s is
clever because it lets the reader see that they already had knowledge of the
subject before they had ever read the piece.
Peter elbow, author of the article “Teaching
Two Kinds of Thinking by Teaching Writing”, utilizes some similar moves to Dirk
as well as some uniquely his. For comparison’s sake, Elbow follows Dirk’s first
move in keeping the title relatively short and to the point. After reading the
title, I’m almost positive I know at least the basics of what the article will
discuss. Elbow also shares the move with Dirk of having a light and somewhat
informal tone throughout his piece. Elbow then begins to diverge off into his
own pattern of writing with his next move, to include himself in his audience.
What I mean by this is that instead of directly addressing his audience with
words such as “you”, he includes himself by using “we” and “us”. For example,
when discussing his first kind of thinking, one sentence reads, “We use it when
we write fast without censoring and let the words lead us to associations and
intuitions we hadn’t forseen.” As Elbow continues with his writing, the most
apparent contrast between his moves and Dirks is that whereas Dirk’s tone was
that of an informal friend enlightening one on what they already knew but were
unaware of, Elbow’s tone is more that of a friendly teacher introducing his
students to something they actually do without being conscious of it. This move
of Elbow’s is seen within his diction and strict “Point A to Point B” organization
of the article. Another huge contrast in the way these two authors move through
their writing is that Elbow does not use examples in the same way Dirk does.
Elbow’s examples are few and far between, and when he does include them, they
are scattered throughout the paragraph rather than completely separated and
emphasized like Dirk’s. This move allows Elbow’s article to flow smoothly from one
learning objective to the next, and to swiftly arrive at a purposeful conclusion
without taking any breaks.
In
my reading of these pieces, I could not find any unsuccessful moves from either
writers. Both of these writers had
mostly successful and efficient moves throughout their works. I believe Dirk’s
providing of very specific examples, specifically the three ransom letters and
following analysis, was the most successful move of hers. It both provided a
real world image of what navigating genres looked like and at the same time
showed the reader how they themselves already knew the correct and appropriate
answer. The most successful move of Elbow’s is his instructional tone, The
objective of Elbow’s piece differed slightly from Dirk’s in that his was aimed
at teaching a new idea whereas Dirk was bringing to light already attained
knowledge. His tone kept the reader interested in discovering just what the “two
kinds of thinking” were, and how they themselves could be conscious of them.
I like your examples at the beginning of common moves that we know. You had a lot of good information and a very easy-going tone that made your piece easy to read. I like how you explained each move and also compared each author. I think over all it was a very good piece.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I really like that you defines 'moves' from a cultural perspective as well as a literary definition. It made me laugh actually because I could actually hear you reading it in your voice, which sounds kind of weird but oh well. I also like the call out of the actual title to the first example you chose. I didn't think to think of the title as a move but it totally is. We both chose Elbow's article to analyze and I liked reading yours because it gave me a different perspective. You brought up the title again which was a move that I didn't catch so that was cool. Also the move of including himself with the readers was one I didn't think of. I wonder though if you could have thought of some moves that you would have done differently if you were the writer. I know you said you couldn't find any unsuccessful moves, but maybe there were some that you would do differently!
ReplyDeleteSyd the Kid,
ReplyDeleteYour analysis of Dirk’s moves was strong, but I especially liked your last observation: his moves helped the reader to understand that they knew some of this stuff already. Big time! Great insight, and I’m glad you connected some of the pieces beyond the page/text itself.
I also liked how you mentioned how Elbow’s examples provided intraparagraph transitions that helped his flow.
PB2A: “Check.”
PB2B: “Check plus.”
Grade for both PBs: 5/5
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